备考2023年高考英语二轮专题：书面表达（应用文·求助信）
一、书面表达
1．（2022高二下·临潼月考）假设你是李华，你的朋友彼得在中国留学，但是他很难适应，写信向你求助，请按以下写作要点给他回信。
1）表示难过；
2）提出合理化建议；
3）提出希望。
2．（2021高二下·南宁月考）假如你是李华，本期你校开设了英语口语课，由于你不太适应外教Chris的授课，你决定给她写一封求助信。主要内容包括：
1）告诉她你的困难；
2）求助的内容；
3）希望得到帮助。
注意：
1）词数100左右，开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数；
2）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Chris,
……
Yours，
Li Hua
3．（2022高三上·勃利开学考）假如你是李华，你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助，请你给他回一封电子邮件。内容包括：
1）表示理解与关心；
2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在的不良影响；
3）提出具体建议。
注意：1）词数100左右；2）可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
Dear Jack
Yours
LiHua
4．（2022高二下·浙江期中）
应用文写作
假定你是李华，你的外国朋友 Peter 已被录取为 2022 年杭州亚运会志愿者。他写信向你求助怎样提高汉语口语能力。请给他回信，内容包括：
1）祝贺应聘成功；
2）提供相关建议；
3）表达美好祝愿。
注意：1）词数 80 左右；
2）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：杭州亚运会 Hangzhou Asian Games
5．（2022高三下·凤县月考）假如你是李华，你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助，请你给他回一封电子邮件。内容包括：
1）表示理解与关心；
2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在不良影响；
3）提出具体建议。
注意：
1）词数100左右；
2）可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
Dear
Jack,
……
Yours,
Li
Hua
6．（2021高二下·慈溪期末）假定你是李华，你的加拿大网友James因玩手机浪费了过多的闲暇时间，给你发来邮件求助。请你根据如下要点，给他回一封邮件：
1）愿意帮助；
2）指出危害；
3）给出建议。
Dear James,
……
Yours,
Li Hua
答案解析部分
1．【答案】Dear Peter,
Sorry to hear that you find it hard to adjust to living and studying in China, I'd like to offer you some practical suggestions.
First of all, you'd better take it easy. This being the first time that you have been in a foreign country, it's natural for you to have trouble settling in. I strongly recommend that you communicate more with your classmates, which will not only improve your spoken Chinese, but also help you fit in with them. What's more, studying in China can have your horizon broadened and give you a chance to experience abundant traditional Chinese culture.
As far as I am concerned, keep it up, and you are bound to love China.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份回信 。写作背景： 你的朋友彼得在中国留学，但是他很难适应，写信向你求助 。写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）表示难过；2）提出合理化建议；3）提出希望。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：Sorry to hear that you find it hard to adjust to living and studying in China, I'd like to offer you some practical suggestions.运用了不定式作原因状语，宾语从句；This being the first time that you have been in a foreign country, it's natural for you to have trouble settling in. 运用了独立主格结构；I strongly recommend that you communicate more with your classmates, which will not only improve your spoken Chinese, but also help you fit in with them. 运用了宾语从句，虚拟语气，非限制性定语从句；What's more, studying in China can have your horizon broadened and give you a chance to experience abundant traditional Chinese culture.运用了动名词作主语。
2．【答案】Dear Chris,
I am Li Hua, one of your students in Oral English class. I am writing to seek help from you.
As you know, I come from a middle school in the countryside, where teachers don't speak much English in class. That is the reason why I am not good at listening or speaking. At present, I find it really difficult to adapt myself to your class. Faced with the above problem, I wonder if you can recommend some listening materials to me so that I can improve my listening after class. Besides, could I practice speaking with you for half an hour at weekends at your convenient time I think it can help me improve my spoken English.
I would be grateful if you could spare time to do me a favour.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份写一封求助信，写作背景：本期你校开设了英语口语课，由于你不太适应外教Chris的授课。写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）告诉她你的困难；2）求助的内容；3）希望得到帮助。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：I am Li Hua, one of your students in Oral English class.运用了同位语；As you know, I come from a middle school in the countryside, where teachers don't speak much English in class.运用了非限制性定语从句； That is the reason why I am not good at listening or speaking. 运用了限制性定语从句；At present, I find it really difficult to adapt myself to your class.运用了it作形式宾语； Faced with the above problem, I wonder if you can recommend some listening materials to me so that I can improve my listening after class. 运用了宾语从句和目的状语从句； I think it can help me improve my spoken English.运用了宾语从句；I would be grateful if you could spare time to do me a favour.运用了条件状语从句。
3．【答案】Dear jack,
On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.
Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study. However, action must be taken before things get worse. In my opinion, you'd better try and develop other hobbies. Besides, communicating with friends face to face will do the trick. Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.
I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. Looking forward to your good news
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份回一封电子邮件。写作背景：你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助 。写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）表示理解与关心；2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在的不良影响；3）提出具体建议。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.运用了介词短语作状语，宾语从句；Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study.运用了主语从句，非限制性定语从句； Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.运用了倒装句；I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. 运用了强调，宾语从句。
4．【答案】Dear Peter,
Congratulations! I'm so glad that you've been accepted as a volunteer for the 2022 Hangzhou Asian Games.
When asked how to improve spoken Chinese, I always have some small tips to share. First, a variety of apps, providing systematic training for spoken Chinese, are found practical and effective. Spoken Chinese 100, for example, is a suitable choice. Besides, seek every opportunity to practice speaking Chinese to natives, which is absolutely the best way to improve your spoken Chinese.
I do hope the volunteer work will be rewarding and that you'll have an unforgettable memory.
Yours,
Li Hua .
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份回信 。写作背景： 你的外国朋友 Peter 已被录取为 2022 年杭州亚运会志愿者。他写信向你求助怎样提高汉语口语能力。 写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）祝贺应聘成功；2）提供相关建议；3）表达美好祝愿。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： I'm so glad that you've been accepted as a volunteer for the 2022 Hangzhou Asian Games.运用了名词性从句；When asked how to improve spoken Chinese, I always have some small tips to share. 运用了省略；First, a variety of apps, providing systematic training for spoken Chinese, are found practical and effective. 运用了被动语态； Besides, seek every opportunity to practice speaking Chinese to natives, which is absolutely the best way to improve your spoken Chinese.运用了祈使句，非限制性定语从句；I do hope the volunteer work will be rewarding and that you'll have an unforgettable memory.运用了宾语从句，强调。
5．【答案】Dear Jack,
On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.
Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study. However, action must be taken before things get worse. In my opinion, you'd better try and develop other hobbies. Besides, communicating with friends face to face will do the trick. Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.
I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. Looking forward to your good news.
yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份 回一封电子邮件 。写作背景： 你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助 ，写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）表示理解与关心；2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在不良影响；3）提出具体建议。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.运用了动名词作宾语，宾语从句；Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study.运用了主语从句，非限制性定语从句； However, action must be taken before things get worse. 运用了时间状语从句；Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.运用了倒装句；I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. 运用了宾语从句，强调。
6．【答案】Dear James,
I'm sorry to hear that playing with the phone takes up most of your leisure time. I'm eager to help you out of trouble.
Spending much time on phones has a great deal of harm. Obviously, your eyesight may fail. Besides, phones will distract your attention and your academic performance will suffer. There's indeed something you can do to get rid of this problem. Why not try something meaningful in your spare time You can read some books that are intended for you or join in some volunteer work. It's also a good idea to work out for physical fitness or hang out with your friends.
I do hope my suggestions can help you get back on track.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份 回一封邮件 。写作背景： 你的加拿大网友James因玩手机浪费了过多的闲暇时间，给你发来邮件求助。 写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）愿意帮助；2）指出危害；3）给出建议。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：I'm sorry to hear that playing with the phone takes up most of your leisure time. 运用了不定式作原因状语，宾语从句；Spending much time on phones has a great deal of harm. 运用了动名词作主语；Besides, phones will distract your attention and your academic performance will suffer. 运用了并列句；There's indeed something you can do to get rid of this problem.运用了限制性定语从句； You can read some books that are intended for you or join in some volunteer work. 运用了限制性定语从句；It's also a good idea to work out for physical fitness or hang out with your friends.运用了it作形式主语；I do hope my suggestions can help you get back on track.运用了宾语从句，强调。
备考2023年高考英语二轮专题：书面表达（应用文·求助信）
一、书面表达
1．（2022高二下·临潼月考）假设你是李华，你的朋友彼得在中国留学，但是他很难适应，写信向你求助，请按以下写作要点给他回信。
1）表示难过；
2）提出合理化建议；
3）提出希望。
【答案】Dear Peter,
Sorry to hear that you find it hard to adjust to living and studying in China, I'd like to offer you some practical suggestions.
First of all, you'd better take it easy. This being the first time that you have been in a foreign country, it's natural for you to have trouble settling in. I strongly recommend that you communicate more with your classmates, which will not only improve your spoken Chinese, but also help you fit in with them. What's more, studying in China can have your horizon broadened and give you a chance to experience abundant traditional Chinese culture.
As far as I am concerned, keep it up, and you are bound to love China.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份回信 。写作背景： 你的朋友彼得在中国留学，但是他很难适应，写信向你求助 。写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）表示难过；2）提出合理化建议；3）提出希望。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：Sorry to hear that you find it hard to adjust to living and studying in China, I'd like to offer you some practical suggestions.运用了不定式作原因状语，宾语从句；This being the first time that you have been in a foreign country, it's natural for you to have trouble settling in. 运用了独立主格结构；I strongly recommend that you communicate more with your classmates, which will not only improve your spoken Chinese, but also help you fit in with them. 运用了宾语从句，虚拟语气，非限制性定语从句；What's more, studying in China can have your horizon broadened and give you a chance to experience abundant traditional Chinese culture.运用了动名词作主语。
2．（2021高二下·南宁月考）假如你是李华，本期你校开设了英语口语课，由于你不太适应外教Chris的授课，你决定给她写一封求助信。主要内容包括：
1）告诉她你的困难；
2）求助的内容；
3）希望得到帮助。
注意：
1）词数100左右，开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数；
2）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Chris,
……
Yours，
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Chris,
I am Li Hua, one of your students in Oral English class. I am writing to seek help from you.
As you know, I come from a middle school in the countryside, where teachers don't speak much English in class. That is the reason why I am not good at listening or speaking. At present, I find it really difficult to adapt myself to your class. Faced with the above problem, I wonder if you can recommend some listening materials to me so that I can improve my listening after class. Besides, could I practice speaking with you for half an hour at weekends at your convenient time I think it can help me improve my spoken English.
I would be grateful if you could spare time to do me a favour.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份写一封求助信，写作背景：本期你校开设了英语口语课，由于你不太适应外教Chris的授课。写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）告诉她你的困难；2）求助的内容；3）希望得到帮助。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：I am Li Hua, one of your students in Oral English class.运用了同位语；As you know, I come from a middle school in the countryside, where teachers don't speak much English in class.运用了非限制性定语从句； That is the reason why I am not good at listening or speaking. 运用了限制性定语从句；At present, I find it really difficult to adapt myself to your class.运用了it作形式宾语； Faced with the above problem, I wonder if you can recommend some listening materials to me so that I can improve my listening after class. 运用了宾语从句和目的状语从句； I think it can help me improve my spoken English.运用了宾语从句；I would be grateful if you could spare time to do me a favour.运用了条件状语从句。
3．（2022高三上·勃利开学考）假如你是李华，你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助，请你给他回一封电子邮件。内容包括：
1）表示理解与关心；
2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在的不良影响；
3）提出具体建议。
注意：1）词数100左右；2）可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
Dear Jack
Yours
LiHua
【答案】Dear jack,
On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.
Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study. However, action must be taken before things get worse. In my opinion, you'd better try and develop other hobbies. Besides, communicating with friends face to face will do the trick. Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.
I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. Looking forward to your good news
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份回一封电子邮件。写作背景：你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助 。写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）表示理解与关心；2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在的不良影响；3）提出具体建议。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.运用了介词短语作状语，宾语从句；Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study.运用了主语从句，非限制性定语从句； Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.运用了倒装句；I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. 运用了强调，宾语从句。
4．（2022高二下·浙江期中）
应用文写作
假定你是李华，你的外国朋友 Peter 已被录取为 2022 年杭州亚运会志愿者。他写信向你求助怎样提高汉语口语能力。请给他回信，内容包括：
1）祝贺应聘成功；
2）提供相关建议；
3）表达美好祝愿。
注意：1）词数 80 左右；
2）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：杭州亚运会 Hangzhou Asian Games
【答案】Dear Peter,
Congratulations! I'm so glad that you've been accepted as a volunteer for the 2022 Hangzhou Asian Games.
When asked how to improve spoken Chinese, I always have some small tips to share. First, a variety of apps, providing systematic training for spoken Chinese, are found practical and effective. Spoken Chinese 100, for example, is a suitable choice. Besides, seek every opportunity to practice speaking Chinese to natives, which is absolutely the best way to improve your spoken Chinese.
I do hope the volunteer work will be rewarding and that you'll have an unforgettable memory.
Yours,
Li Hua .
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份回信 。写作背景： 你的外国朋友 Peter 已被录取为 2022 年杭州亚运会志愿者。他写信向你求助怎样提高汉语口语能力。 写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）祝贺应聘成功；2）提供相关建议；3）表达美好祝愿。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： I'm so glad that you've been accepted as a volunteer for the 2022 Hangzhou Asian Games.运用了名词性从句；When asked how to improve spoken Chinese, I always have some small tips to share. 运用了省略；First, a variety of apps, providing systematic training for spoken Chinese, are found practical and effective. 运用了被动语态； Besides, seek every opportunity to practice speaking Chinese to natives, which is absolutely the best way to improve your spoken Chinese.运用了祈使句，非限制性定语从句；I do hope the volunteer work will be rewarding and that you'll have an unforgettable memory.运用了宾语从句，强调。
5．（2022高三下·凤县月考）假如你是李华，你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助，请你给他回一封电子邮件。内容包括：
1）表示理解与关心；
2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在不良影响；
3）提出具体建议。
注意：
1）词数100左右；
2）可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
Dear
Jack,
……
Yours,
Li
Hua
【答案】Dear Jack,
On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.
Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study. However, action must be taken before things get worse. In my opinion, you'd better try and develop other hobbies. Besides, communicating with friends face to face will do the trick. Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.
I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. Looking forward to your good news.
yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份 回一封电子邮件 。写作背景： 你的外国网友Jack沉迷于抖音(tiktok)不能自拔，写信向你求助 ，写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）表示理解与关心；2）分析抖音对我们生活可能存在不良影响；3）提出具体建议。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：On hearing that you have been addicted to tiktok recently, I feel terribly sorry and can't wait to write this email in reply to your problem.运用了动名词作宾语，宾语从句；Actually, it is commonly seen that a growing number of teenagers get crazy about tiktok, spending plenty of time watching and sharing videos online, which makes it hard for them to focus on study.运用了主语从句，非限制性定语从句； However, action must be taken before things get worse. 运用了时间状语从句；Only in this way will you shift your attention and form good habits.运用了倒装句；I do hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. 运用了宾语从句，强调。
6．（2021高二下·慈溪期末）假定你是李华，你的加拿大网友James因玩手机浪费了过多的闲暇时间，给你发来邮件求助。请你根据如下要点，给他回一封邮件：
1）愿意帮助；
2）指出危害；
3）给出建议。
Dear James,
……
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear James,
I'm sorry to hear that playing with the phone takes up most of your leisure time. I'm eager to help you out of trouble.
Spending much time on phones has a great deal of harm. Obviously, your eyesight may fail. Besides, phones will distract your attention and your academic performance will suffer. There's indeed something you can do to get rid of this problem. Why not try something meaningful in your spare time You can read some books that are intended for you or join in some volunteer work. It's also a good idea to work out for physical fitness or hang out with your friends.
I do hope my suggestions can help you get back on track.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式应用文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇英文信件，要求考生以李华的身份 回一封邮件 。写作背景： 你的加拿大网友James因玩手机浪费了过多的闲暇时间，给你发来邮件求助。 写作要点已经给出，属于提纲类作文，内容包括：1）愿意帮助；2）指出危害；3）给出建议。提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。本题对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如：I'm sorry to hear that playing with the phone takes up most of your leisure time. 运用了不定式作原因状语，宾语从句；Spending much time on phones has a great deal of harm. 运用了动名词作主语；Besides, phones will distract your attention and your academic performance will suffer. 运用了并列句；There's indeed something you can do to get rid of this problem.运用了限制性定语从句； You can read some books that are intended for you or join in some volunteer work. 运用了限制性定语从句；It's also a good idea to work out for physical fitness or hang out with your friends.运用了it作形式主语；I do hope my suggestions can help you get back on track.运用了宾语从句，强调。

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