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Part V Writing
妙笔生花(读后续写)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Special Appointment
　　Years ago I moved to Woodland Hills to take a job in a small hospital’s emergency department. No one wanted to work on New Year’s Eve，so the shift（轮班）went to me. I kissed my family goodbye and went off to spend the night in the hospital. It was a thankless job.
　　At 9 pm，the ambulance brought in a man in his 60s who was having a heart attack. His face was pale，and he was frightened. The whole night I did my best to save his life. Before I left in the morning to spend New Year with my family，I stopped by to see how he was doing. It was still tough，but he had survived the night and was sleeping.
　　The following year I got New Year’s Eve duty again. At 9 pm sharp，the ward clerk told me there was a couple who wanted to speak with me. When I approached them，the man introduced himself as Mr. Lee and said，“You probably don’t remember me，but last New Year’s Eve you saved my life. Thank you for the year you gave me.” He and his wife hugged me，handed me a small gift，and left.
　　The following year a new doctor had joined the group，but I wanted to see if Mr. and Mrs. Lee would return. This time，I volunteered for the shift. I kept an eye on the door. Once again，at exactly 9 pm，the Lees appeared，carrying a warmly wrapped bundle. It was their new grandchild.
　　Mr. Lee，his family and I spent 13 New Year’s Eves together. In the later years the staff all knew about the story and would work to give me time with him in the break room，where we spent a half-hour each New Year’s Eve.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
Last year I saw Mrs. Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me.
I carefully opened the package and found a crystal （水晶） bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved （雕刻） on it.
　　步骤一：品读语篇——抓住要点很关键
　　前文概要
　　审体裁：记叙文
　　审时态：一般过去时
　　审前文大意以及要点：
　　第一段：介绍作者新到一家小医院急诊室上班，新年前夜值班；
　　第二段：介绍作者在新年前夜抢救了一位患心脏病的病人，早上病人转危为安；
　　第三段：病人夫妇感恩作者，到医院送礼物；
　　第四段：作者主动值夜班，期望见到病人夫妇；
　　第五段：连续13年病人夫妇都在新年前夜和作者团聚。
　　步骤二：戴着镣铐跳舞——研读首句，高度融合原文，合理想象情节
　　1.第一段所给首句：Last year I saw Mrs. Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me.
　　上文提到Mr. Lee夫妇连续13年和作者一起过新年前夜，结合首句中的alone可知，Mr. Lee可能因病去世，而Mrs. Lee拿着的礼物，可能是Mr. Lee临终前留给作者的。
　　2. 第二段所给首句：I carefully opened the package and found a crystal bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved on it.
　　作者打开包裹看到的是一个上面刻着单词“友谊”的水晶铃。由此作者所想到的应该是他们一起度过的新年前夜以及他们之间的友谊。
　　结尾句：应该围绕the crystal bell收尾。
　　步骤三：斟酌打磨——丰富续写词汇，生动描述情节
　　话题激活词汇
　　疾病：heart attack，headache，stomachache，toothache
　　动作：kiss，spend，give，hug，survive，sleep，die
　　礼物：gift，present，package，bell
　　心理状态：frightened，thankful，thankless，grateful
　　句式翻译
　　1. 李先生两天前心脏病复发去世了。（die from）
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　　2. 他没有忘记我们的约定，几天前准备了这个最后的礼物。（and连接的并列句）
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　　3. 他怀着一颗感恩的心过了长达13年有意义的生活。（and连接并列谓语）
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　　4. 当我看着铃的时候，我想起了和Lee一家人度过的新年前夜以及我们之间的友谊。（when引导的时间状语从句；which引导的定语从句）
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　　5. 现在我和我的家人、朋友每个新年的前夜都会在晚上9点摇响铃，来表达我们对所铭记的人最美好的祝愿。（and连接并列谓语）
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　　步骤四：创造性表达——润色注重细节，句式再造升级
　　1. 用she told me升级第1句
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　　2. 用so连接的并列句升级第2句
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　　3. 用as long as（表示“长达……”）升级第3句
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　　4. 用动词-ing形式作状语；动词-ed形式作定语升级第4句
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　　5. 用动词-ing形式作伴随状语升级第5句
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步骤五：高分在即——连句成篇
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Part V Writing
参考答案
步骤三
1. Mr. Lee died from another heart attack two days ago.
2.He had never forgotten our appointment and he prepared the last gift days ago.
3.He lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for 13 years.
4.When I saw the bell，I looked back on the New Year’s Eves which I spent with the Lees and the friendship between us.
5. Now，my family，my friends and I ring that bell on every New Year’s Eve at exactly 9 pm and offer our best wishes to the men who we won’t forget.
步骤四
1. She told me Mr. Lee died from another heart attack two days ago.
2. He had never forgotten our appointment，so he prepared the last gift days ago.
3. He lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for as long as 13 years.
4.Seeing the bell，I looked back on the New Year’s Eves spent with the Lees and the friendship between us.
5.Now，my family，my friends and I ring that bell on every New Year’s Eve at exactly 9 pm，offering our best wishes to the men who we won’t forget.
步骤五
One possible version：
　　Last year I saw Mrs. Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me. Mrs. Lee looked pale. She told me Mr. Lee died from another heart attack two days ago. He had never forgotten our appointment，so he prepared the last gift days ago. He lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for as long as 13 years. The appointment was a reminder of the fortune he got from me. Mrs. Lee then handed me a package.
　　I carefully opened the package and found a crystal bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved on it. Seeing the bell，I looked back on the New Year’s Eves spent with the Lees and the friendship between us. Now，my family，my friends and I ring that bell on every New Year’s Eve at exactly 9 pm，offering our best wishes to the men who we won’t forget. The bell always reminds us of being helpful to others and thankful to people who have helped us.

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